by Bailey Jul 3, 2013
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
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Tears run down my face, |
by BlueJay
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Your flow's not so flawless in this one. Your last few stanzas make the piece a bit rocky. However the , message is good and your story is clear. Your word choice was decent and your use of emotion was ok. The piece wasn't exactly memorable but it was still alright. |
by Bailey
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This was one of my earlier poems.. |