Your Place

Heartrending piece. I wish I could say something in this little box that might soothe you or remind you that everything happens for a reason, and that i relate to this so much more than you would realize. But I'm not sure how something like that is possible. So instead, let me share my thoughts on such a raw piece.

I know you're not coming home,
You've gone too far away.
I 'm wasting my time waiting,
Wasted all those days.

^^ Starting pieces with such direction and aim towards one person is an excellent skill and strategy. You also intruged me with such an introduction.

I can feel it in my heart,
Deep within my core.
It's been over two years now,
And I can't keep pretending anymore.

^^ Good job sharing the emotion in such vivid description this made it easier to relate.

My hope died a long time ago,
Candle light dimmed low.
Now it's beyond out,
With what I've come to know.

^ I like the simplicity of this stanza. It is beautiful.

I haven't started grieving yet,
Can't sooth my hard, hard heart.
I could tell myself otherwise,
But it just tears me apart.

^^ Great way of moving the story along and of giving your take on the events.

I searched for so long,
So many, many years.
Drowned in disappointment,
Cried too many tears.

^^ Here is really where i relate. This is what strikes home for me. And as long ago as i lived this very stanza it still has not gotten any easier. Which may not help, but that pain has led me to do better things in my life than i otherwise would have. Good job. sorry bout my story.

I know you're in only one place,
A place I cannot find.
One that I'll later reach,
But for now, I wait behind.

^^ Stunning way to mention that it is Death that has taken this person. I love the creativity behind this stanza.

I long to hold you,
See you just once more.
But I know that it will never be,
Never be how it was before.

^^ I like how you began wrapping the piece up here. Good job on that.

You left a void here,
A big cold, empty space,
And I feel so lost with out you,
Lost and out of place.

^^ This is a perfect ending for this piece. Fantastic/.