Catatonic Lullaby

Amazing, wow, nothing else to say. Except wow. :)

First- I love how in the first two lines that you make the children small and innocent. You also make it seem like they are fragile and you put the tone as dark very dark. Then the final two lines make the twist in the poem. You show them out to be something evil and dark. The first thing I thought of is they are your demons coming to life. Again I love thr tone you used here. You were going for very eerie and that worked very well here.

Second- I still love the innocent feeling you used for them with the sweet and giggling but it again turns dark. I love the imagery you used here though. The blood drawn from your arms and and scars they left. I get the feeling that you wrote this about your nightmares. Life can hold a lot of monsters and you wrote it well here. I loved how you used the word winced. That gives me the thought that you are not used to the pain and the feelings are new in your life.

Third/end- The use of black is very underrated here I believe. It is simple but it adds so much to the tone of the poem. This stanza the third one holds so much sadness and you can clearly see the tone. Any way the ending is very sad for sure. I love how the darkness is your savior. But I get what your saying. The monster come to life in the light and in the darkness you cannotsee them.. overall a great poem. Well ddone.