I really enjoyed the tone of this poem, how it had a mysterious theme of almost trying to capture someone, and trap them into falling into your spell.
I think your wording was really good, but also the way you narrated the poem, it worked really well and was like you were aiming it at the reader.
I especially liked your opening line, I think everyone at some point, wants to, or has, rebelled against something. And this reminded me of those who deny it, and like to think they are perfect, and do not even think of the temptation.
6 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
I very much enjoyed this poem as well. It's probably the best "dark" love poem I've read on here. The metaphors are very lovely overall and I enjoyed the sense of sarcasm though. It feels like you took love and slapped it in the face haha. It was nice to see someone write a dark toned poem that twisted love around. I loved how your story enfolded here it seems like the first line of each stanza holds hope for the person but it all falls apart in the end. The very last line of "hate me" made me laugh. It's right there in your face and holds a powerful message. You don't want tofeel loved and I loved the twisted humour. BBeautiful beautiful write. I am going to nominate when I can. This deserves to be!
Oh..this is my kind of poetry...well the dark side of me anyway! I do love how you start each stanza with a command..like you are in control of the situation from the very beginning. You are egging this person on...daring them in fact! yet, all the time I feel you want them to hate you..why?...some sort of revenge I feel...not necessarily directed to the person who is with you in the poem...I'd say it's more to do with a particular gender...wickedly dark...loved it
There is a mystery surrounded in this write. Your choice of words and the flow of the story kept the interest till the end, wanting more. The images are very vivid and the very last line just hits the nail. Indeed its the best dark write ever!
Dark romance at its finest in this poem!! I read it the first and second time with my mouth open!! Speechless came to mind.. It's difficult to pull off a romantic dark poem... it takes the right wording and needs an enchanting rhythm ... this poem is magical and a true delight!!
I like the format and I seem to find it romantic in a dark way. It's very demanding and yet at the same time it promises something that both seem to enjoy but it's for a momentarily pleasure, it's very well written, beautiful imagery, and the tone was stunning.
Sensuality wrapped in darkness...this poem hits nerves in a delightful way...wow! I have been reading hugely from here and I must say the darkness and sexy feel of this one is a stand-out! Added to my faves.