by Dakota Jun 10, 2014
category :
Dark, fantasy /
other
Everything you ever had told me |
by BlueJay
As well written as this piece is there are a few things that would probably make it a little bit better. Just in technique mostly. The only thing that is not in the technique is me saying that I totally support poets that don't capitalize the word i when it gives life to the piece or personality, but the fact you only capitalized the very first word in the piece and that word did not need emphasis it is clear this was not done for an artistic purpose. This being said, I believe the piece would be more unified and have a more expressed strength if you were to capitalize something - either the I s or words you want to emphasize ( like die and darkness or other side or something?) but of course this is just a suggestion. The only other thing you might want to improve is only having one "?' at the end of the piece. By putting three I got very distracted. |