It hurts <\3

by shiwani   Jul 6, 2014


When i first saw you :)
i knew this feeling was new ,

that every moment spend with you
was very precious then you ever knew,

it was just about me and you
the only lovestory i ever knew,

i was deeply in love with you,
and the faith that your love
towards me was also true ,

that's how we spend 3 years together
and there was nothing
which made us bothered

for me it was only you ,
for you it was only me,

but, what happened to you later?
why you+me was over?

why your love towards me started fading,
why you ain't even cared ,about the hurt which i was bearing. :(:

as i told, you will be mine first and last ,
but you already made me your past ..

now i just recall all memories which you and i had ,
searching for that love ,but now i realize its actually dead :(

it hurts </3

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  • 11 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Depending on what you want to achieve out of poetry
    Is how I could critique this piece, a quick few tips if you want to progress -

    Knew new, you used them way too much, you can rewrite most things and still get the same message across, you don't need faces e.g :(

    Your writing is powerful enough, I'm not gonna go into anything else because I don't know your true nature to writing,

    If your writing to get your feelings out, this is really good and honest poem very emotional

    Keep writing well done
    :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Lovely poem,

    Good Work

  • 11 years ago

    by Saravana Kumar S

    Honest Poem...Keep writing...

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