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Very fast flow, I liked it, I always enjoy fast and choppy poetry when it is written well, and you have used some good rhyming words in here that work well for me.

I think the poem content itself is very good, very easy to relate to and I love again the metaphors you use to show us how you feel, like being the rat in the cage.

My favourite line was probably when you said there is no remedy for secrets we keep, that really jumped out at me, and I would love to see a poem about this line itself, what secret are you holding and what has it done to you.

Very good work.