Our life is determined and planned out before we are greeted by the world..yes I agree and then there are some situations in life happens because of our doing too. No matter what there is always the higher power who knows what lies ahead..good one.
The poem was very simplistic, yet the lines hold a certain truth that is echoed through many different interpretations. I loved the imagery you used as it created a nice picture to see as I read and the rhyming was a nice touch as well. Kept the poem flowing from the beginning till the end.
"Let's write a script
Thy has no conflict"
For this stanza, I was curious if perhaps you meant to say "that" instead of "thy". It would make it flow it a bit better and sound more natural.
All in all, this was a great poem that lets us all think about how we are part of something bigger than all of us. I can't wait to read some more poems by you. Great job and keep writing.
God has written that script for us and I have learned that when we try to change the script according to what we think it should be, then the problems begin. We should always follow God's plan and script, will lessen the heartaches and problems in our lives. Nice work.
4 years ago
by Augastus Black
I would say that vitality is truely fabulous. But there are many people who are not writing their Script of life in a right way. I am really very sorry for them.