Comments : My Love

  • 11 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Very good! I would suggest a comma in between "without you" and "I." for instance:

    "Without you, I wither and dry."

    Nice rhymes and metaphors.

    • 11 years ago

      by alka mendiratta

      Thank you,there it goes .
      My very first attempt with metaphors.
      Enjoying the learning:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Wooooooooooooooooo
    great
    in short every think

  • 11 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Two lines, yet it wraps it all up; the feelings and the moments of love. Well done!