Comments : Relampago(Tanka)

  • 8 years ago

    by Everlasting

    That blooms into red and orange.

    ^ this line is actually 8 syllables! I think.
    I mean isn't orange equal to two syllables?

    Other than that, I love the way you described the relampago. your descriptions allowed me to see it, and they made me feel like I was there when it happened, in that moment.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Crack of blinding light.
    White veins(layer) spreading across skies,
    piercing(cut) the dark veil.(COVER)
    Cascade(flow) deadly beauty
    that blooms in red and orange.

    I track all difficult words meaning in your poem, What ever you have written looking nice, just explain me its meaning.

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish that is a beautiful painting of words! Nicely
    done. I was thinking what "Relampago" meant, thanks
    for the explanation. Good to read your poem after a long time. Take care and keep penning.