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  • 5 years ago

    by Jad

    Mohan, a very emotional piece. I love the many emotions you bring to the table in this poem. I can feel love, sadness, and regret very strongly in this poem. It's so often the case though that after someone we love very much leaves us, we find ourselves not moving forward in life and hoping and holding onto something that may never be again. If this is referring to someone who has passed away, then the poems message changes slightly and you realize that when losing someone, you will either be able to move on and remember the good times, or you will long for what you can't have. One more day with this person and that hinders you from moving on in life.

    As for the poem, the poem was a bit out of flow, but I was able to clearly understand your message and see your true emotions you wrote for us.

    "Sorry I can not forget you,
    because your memories are not soured grapes."
    ^^^^
    I am curious about the ending. I am wondering if you relate not being able to forget to sour grapes because when grapes ferment it turns to wine and wine helps relieve pain and help us forget? If not this then I am confused by your imagery of the last line. This could be more powerful to those who live where you live though and I could just be ignorant of normalcy where you live.

    All in all, I really enjoyed this poem from start to finish. I hope you continue to write and that you learn from that grow as a poet. Great job and keep writing!

    • 5 years ago

      by Mohan

      I mean soured grapes are tasteless but your memories are not like that.
      Thank you for the comment.

  • 5 years ago

    by I am

    Hmmmmmmmmmmm
    Great i know ur feeling, these are true feeling.
    But its life go forward.

  • 5 years ago

    by I am

    Hmmmmmmmmmmm
    Great i know ur feeling, these are true feeling.
    But its life go forward.

  • 5 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Love is hard to forget and the person who gave that love is even more harder to forget! This write has pain, fond memories and moments which the writer is unable to forget.

    Sorry I can not forget you,
    because your memories are not soured grapes.

    ^^I like this ending. For sour grapes are something can be forgotten after tasting it; yet your love for this person is something that cannot be forgotten or let go off..touching.

  • 5 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Well penned !!!!

    In hope to see the lost love again.It is difficult for the writer to let go the fond memories of the loved one.Life seems to come to a halt.

    'but you know,I am still standing where you left me.
    For I believe one day you'll turn back."

  • 5 years ago

    by gumshuda

    This poem is really attractively written....

    Generally most love poems have the same all ramblings same old cliches but this poem......
    This poem is different..
    I like the choice of your words... It's very unique

    The very first sentence of your poem... My clock stops at midnight..... Is extremely creative. Truthfully I've never read a love poem as good as this one. So unique.

    And the last line...... That is creative too.... Comparison of memories with sour grapes. Although these memories are site you still hold them sweet....

    So very well written...

    Keep sharing.