Comments : Tonic

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    What do we have here ?! Very nice Mayfairy; I can agree with every word and you wont be amazed I know.
    i love how you connected this state with silence, I really understand how that feels. And sometimes its the best we could do :)

    Your last 3 lines were very special and vivid.
    Loved your title so much.

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Your brevity here is memorable. Only suggestion would be to place a semi-colon or dash after "infect the very heart of me"? But the comma works too obviously, just suggested to switch it up.

    This just shows your soul here, Andrea. How human and how what others go through or speak about can affect you. Even someone is troubled, I do think you feel it and feel that empathy. I admire how you can connect with anyone.

    There's a certain kind of mystery and darkness in this, too? My favorite line was "shadows are drawn like scriptures" - wow, have never heard anything like that. It makes me think you, or someone else, clings to what they know, these shadows, in hopes it will give them answers. Like how people may turn to meditation or prayers perhaps. I think it shows your vulnerability too, these nightmares haunt you during day and night and you can't easily let them go from mind or tongue.

    Powerful write, lots between the lines.