I love how this piece was written. It is descriptive and personal while still allowing the world to see that the relationship you have with this person is not only important to you but beautiful as well. Amazingly penned piece.
So lovely, Mel, congrats on the win! What makes this poem stand out that much more is as mentioned above, it's personal and these images and scents hold so much meaning to you. It's refreshing to read, too.
Your olfactory and tactile impressions arise from an earlier age than many of us can relate. You seem to lead us through a scene of developing awareness - of drainpipes looming out at a child's level, cataclysms so much greater than anything that came before that they eclipsed experience.
Is this metaphor for love's overpowering dominance of your ego structure? Or is it straightforward reverie?
I think it is neither and both, something much more that I have not even come close to touching on.
This poem feels like home. Very stylish, unique, different. Speaks of its own genre, has its own stamp! What a very classy art.
Fell for every single word, from the very 1st you to the very last point in this poem.
The imagery is just unbelievably original and innovative. This is one of those poems that one ponders upon.
The many different aspects in the poem reflects how this personal attribute in its different forms, and different circumstances could be related-by, by anyone else towards their own by the strong affection and emotion between the lines.
The poem stands like a queen in this contest. Keep the ink flowing.
Mel is the Queen of word display in my opinion... this deeply moving description of her home leaves me speechless!!
I tasted salt water.. I could hear and ocean perhaps... just wow!
Elegant, and powerful on visual displays!! Lovely!!
5 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
Where is Home? It could be anywhere that our heart chooses it to be. That is what I think this poem means. I also love how you have written this piece, The metaphors are wonderful and the word play here is outstanding at its best. You captured the essence of the world in one poem. I also think this could be about moods and how one can feel all in one body. Is it love you have for this person or is it bipolar maybe? It could be both, but that is the beauty of poetry you let the readers mind flow from one thought to the next and that is what makes poetry special. 5/5