Comments : The City Bus

  • 7 years ago

    by Mahal Ko Kuya Ko

    This is beautiful (: Added to my favorites (:

    City bus is the metaphor for departure, and stepping on it will be a start of new challenges, new adjustments, and a whole new world. You are being observant, in hopes that you may find something that won't make you feel alone. Again, you have showed in this piece how poetry will let us know the stories and tales of others.

    The man behind the glasses,
    wishing for a puff of smoke,
    I see the yellowing
    formed upon the tips
    of a cigarette holder,
    his fingers bare more tales
    than stains from tobacco

    ^^^ My favorite part. The imagery is just powerful. Everyone has an inner depth, something that may be vaguely seen by our naked
    eyes, can be felt by the heart.

    We may feel alone, but as long as there's a fire of poetry that burns in our hearts, everyone in a city we will come to know is part of our family

    Lovely write (: I definitely love this so much (:

    --- MKKK

  • 7 years ago

    by Rania

    A front page..
    a favorite..

  • 7 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Interesting sights and tales I experience while walking along your words. Very enjoyable the twists and turns.

  • 7 years ago

    by Meme

    This must win the weekly. This must be read!!

  • 7 years ago

    by GB

    Weekly contest April 27th
    Judging comment:

    Smashing piece, no doubt. Somehow we are connected invisibly in this world, lonely but not alone. These thoughts are interpreted brilliantly in this writing.
    The truthful insight portrayed in attractive layout, great imagery and use of language, the poem is very vivid.
    A professional use of contradiction also must be noted,
    ~bringing auras alive within poetry/ lay dormant within
    my tattered nightmares...
    and lastly she knew very well to end this human experiment realistically.
    Excellent, a joy to read.

  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Yes, a commuter's tale! Brave and lovely.5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Awesome! I totally get the people watching, you see so much of someone when they don't realize they are being watched. I love the stalker and being able to feed off their auras-so deep.

  • 6 years ago

    by Sagedream

    Speechless

  • 5 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    A city stalker, huh?! Your poem ozzed excitement and imagery. Loved it!