A new hope (personal )

by Brookie   Apr 29, 2015


These tattered walls might fall anyday now,
they've been holding this weight for lifetimes
and i marvel at the strength of this little structure!
Is this really a new beginning, am i truly safe?

If this house could talk would it tell me its pain,
the abuse thats been shed onto it from years
of neglect and abuse and tormented souls?
Or would it weep in silence as do I...?

I come from stronger walls with tougher frames
not yet weakened from an eternity of guilt.
Ones who are still eager to weather the storms
that creep into basements and floods them.

My old home still haunts me...

But as this house sings its rickety song in the wind
i realize it's just the lullaby of those who have been forgotten,
will i add my name into this structure as i pass on?
All i know is that now im safe from the demons of blood.

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Blood in the last line.refers to family. Im in a new home...
New place... a new hope. This poem has hope there... this is my safety.

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  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Ones who still is eager to weather the storms
    that creep into basements and floods them.

    - the grammar here is not quite right.
    It should read better if you have it as:

    "Ones who are still eager to weather the storms....."

    I am glad you shared this with us, and let us in to your situation right now. I think you have done well by adding the right amount of emotion and showing us where you have come from and where you are at now.

    I think you should edit the poem a bit more, capital I, commas, apostrophes etc.

    Your ending is strong, showing that you do not know what the future holds, but you are hopeful about it because you no longer have "family" around to hold you back and haunt you.

    The tone in this poem is great, showing what it can be like to move on, even though we do not know what we are moving on to, we only know what we are moving on from.

    Great job.

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