Comments : Whisper to an empty wind

  • 6 years ago

    by Jad

    A very touching write that speaks from the heart to many hearts. There were so many little phrases in this poem that speak deeply and that many feel at the time of ones death. I often think we don't think enough about this world's inevitability. We get so close to someone and become fast friends and we never think about a day when they won't be there.

    Structurally wise, this poem could use a little work to clear up the stanzas, and there are a few spelling mistakes woven throughout the poem. The main broken up stanzas are good, however, I would break those up into a couple of lines to make it a bit easier to read and the poem would flow better as a result.

    I do understand that this poem was probably written with many emotions so do not take my criticism too heavily. The emotions and deepness of the poem are wonderfully done. So much so that I can easily relate to your words as I remember those who I have counted among my friends that are no longer here. I hope you find comfort and are able to focus on the many memories you have had with this person! Great job and keep writing!

    • 6 years ago

      by kelleyana

      Thanks for your comment...)

    • 6 years ago

      by kelleyana

      Thanks for your comment

  • 6 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Good one but its very sad

    • 6 years ago

      by kelleyana

      Thanks for your comment

  • 6 years ago

    by Raven

    Took the words right out of my mouth, but your poem flows so well. The "for months" line.... Well done.

    I tried voting twice, wouldn't let me . X

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Life is such...we meet extra ordinary people who turn our lives around, may they be friends, relatives or even a total stranger. Through their hardship, sickness and all we can learn many lessons and the biggest lesson to live with is their loss...

  • 6 years ago

    by Faithless

    I could feel the sadness as you weave your words and emotions about your dying friend. I guess it must've been hard on the other side too; to tell your love ones that you don't have much time left.

    That illness that paralyzed our line our communications
    ^^^
    I love the way you phrase it.

    Other than that it's a worthy piece to read.
    Good Job

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    What a sad, beautifully written piece.

  • 6 years ago

    by GB

    Melancholic but beautifully written, thank you for sharing and thank you as well for visiting my page :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Aw Kelleyana,

    To let go is so hard, especially when the person is extra special. I am sorry you have to go through this, but know that you will ultimately meet again.
    A beautiful tribute to a loved friend:)

    Take care, dear lady xx Ingrid

  • 6 years ago

    by Cindy

    KelleyanaI read this with tears filling my eyes. I have felt these same feelings losing people that I loved so much. I think your special friend did so much for the people he cared for. Keep your memories close to your heart and he will still be there giving his strength to the ones who were special to him.
    Take care
    Love Cindy

  • 6 years ago

    by Cindy

    Kelleyana
    I had to come back and read this again. I was missing a special friend today. Your words have so much sadness coming from them.
    Excellent job
    Love Cindy

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    Kelleyana,
    This was such a heartfelt yet beautiful, sincere piece.
    The heart writes such beauty when dull of grief.take care