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  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This is a poem in old English, very eloquent and very passionate.

    Strike, sway, strike, strike, sway
    My soul runs amok.
    Bless me with thy music forevermore.

    ^^^
    I liked this stanza best, it reveals so much about the feelings the writer has for the significant other:)

    Well done!

    5/5 Ingrid

    • 8 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      Thank you for that Ingrid! Yes, feelings I can hardly contain.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Excellently done. I was always going to like this as I love poems/novels written in old English. I have spent many years of my life obsessed with Shakespeare!
    It really isn't easy to do, and most English don't come close, so well done for being brave enough to give it a go, but also for doing it so well.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 6 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the language of old English and you have penned it well
    without a single hic cup! It flowed and from the read I gather lots
    of feelings lie within it...well done!

  • 6 years ago

    by Hope

    nicely penned!

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Very good Miss M, your old English is better than my modern day haha :)

    well written piece of emotions x

  • 6 years ago

    by Maher

    Mel, this is very beautiful :) I love that you've written this in old English, as that's what I'm used to reading religious texts in. For some reason old English seems to suit this topic best.

    "Bold of me to try to
    solidify Thee in phrases
    that come beating out of my heart's recess."

    My favourite verse. Very beautifully written, honest and to the point. I've run out of nominations, but I clicked that 'Like' button about 8 times. Stingy bugga only gave you 1 Like though.

    Thanks for sharing this piece with us all :)

    • 6 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      Wow, Maher, this is such a heart-warming comment. Thank you for appreciating the piece. I love Old English, and I found it perfect to express the feelings I have. Old English has somehow a different tug at heartstrings. :-) One like is more than enough!

  • 6 years ago

    by chandelier

    Beautifully written Liz :)

    • 6 years ago

      by mossgirl19

      Thank you so much, Chandi! I gave you a nick name. :-)

  • 6 years ago

    by Stephen Levant

    Fair damsel, without tardy completion 'tis within you, methinks, to allow the expression of hearts full. My brave soul pondering.

  • 6 years ago

    by Mahesh Kachare

    You have written this poem so nicely

  • 6 years ago

    by Lemon Squeezy

    This is brilliant and deep quite a masterful piece. Well done!! I enjoyed reading this heartfelt poem. Great work!