Comments : Autumn's Fading Whisper

  • 8 years ago

    by Angie

    I feel this one to the very center of my being...

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is a truly magnificent write. Well done.

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    NOMINATED!!!

    Oh my Syrup, I always love your writing, lets face it everyone knows that and its for a bloody good reason O.o

    Every stanza is written in the most wonderful and beautiful way, really it's freakin hypnotic when you write like this there is so much Feeling and emotion just ooooozing out of it it is truely breathtaking and just like Angie said it's a poem that touches the very center me, of most people who think the way we do.

    I could blah blah on about your word choice, flow anf tempo of the piece all of which are flawless but to be honest you metaphorical queen, for me, to break it down like that would ruin it for me...I just wanna float between the lines for a bit.

    Of all the nature engtangled writes of yours this is one of my favourites, just perfect! x

  • 8 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Sooooooo.

    Ha.

    I can't even.

    Let me get my white girl on by "can't evening",right now

    So I read this first and said, "wait a minute whatttttt??" I was reading and trying too hard
    I was trying to figure out a deeper meaning than what it was.so I read it again

    you literally didn't have a deeper meaning you just did what you do best, which is write about nature but personify it! You give nature a human like description, which brings soooooo much life to my perception on nature by the way. and you also got me entirely too excited for fall!
    this is breath taking.....

    Forgive me.... I'm actually going to come back aand comment more in depth... this is added to my favorites!

  • 8 years ago

    by Darren

    It is quite rare that you write a nature poem, so for this great foray into the nature category I believe it deserves nomination.

    well done

  • 8 years ago

    by The Fallen Angel

    Breath Taking!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Meme

    Weekly Contest Judging comment:
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    When your pen hits the paper, nature suddenly becomes a person. I have not yet seen anyone with such talent and ability. You give it another dimension, another life. If only others could see things, the way you do. I love autumn, and I think the melancholy in it is what captures me the most about it. In this piece, you made autumn become a person and I found myself falling in love with that person, and thereby falling in love with this poem. Breathtaking, the least I can say!

  • 8 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Special in every way, this poem in all its nature naturally humanized characteristics really stands out from other recent nature poems and deserves a highlight.

    I was mesmerized by the tone and by the feeling of it, it's floating with magic and senses.

    This could feel like a love poem if not categorized under nature poems, pertinent to the very powerful and apparent connection between you as the writer, and nature as the theme and inspiration behind it.

    Well done and hats off!

  • 7 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    As usual you have written an exceptional poem full of really strong visuals. I can smell the Autumn leaves and the crackling embers. This poem also has an underlying mood of sadness the wish for the leaves to shadow your very existence for the Autumn chill to add colour to sickly cheeks.
    The feeling that there will always be critical people even though your tears fall.
    From your poems and in particular this one I feel your at oneness with nature. Your roots remaining with every tree.
    The sadness that humans no longer seem to understand the significance and importance of nature and your need to protect and keep it well.

    It makes me believe that no matter what the season you will always be part of the nature that surrounds you and in the winter of your existence will nourish and give back all that you can.

    I love the portrayal of your inner connection with nature.

  • 3 years ago

    by Mary

    I only know what feelings have taken hold of me as I read your words. Sadness, as I wonder who will remember me after I've passed. And will my life had made any significance difference in the lives of loved ones or anybody else. I would like to think so.