Each verse in this poem is so well penned its hard to say which one stood out for me or which was my favorite because your use of language here gives the reader a very vivid images that while reading one can blend in with it. The last lines:
but farewells can't reach
those who bleed behind trampled flowers...
...like I do.
^^Ohh...I can just see those trampled flowers and because you have used these as a symbol of you, I can see, feel the trampled image of a heart been used and trampled upon then left to die. I always wonder whether flowers bleed but this image of your emotions linked with the flower makes it possible and heartfelt!
Also the space you left between those lines and "...like I do" creates an impact one can sympathize as well as empathize with you...beautifully penned!
7 years ago
by Ben Pickard
Beautifully penned with some wonderful imagery throughout. Excellent piece and take care,