Interesting form and thanks for the explanation...have to try this! I also like your choice of words here for it creates the mood, sets the tone of the heart and the end:
to taste ambiguity
of newborn orchids.
^^It gives a sense of freshness, the first time for something new and just to taste it in every way makes the heart wanting and yearning for it-the anticipation here is given without giving too much! Nicely done!
4 years ago
This is beautiful! I'm a big fan of forms when done in a refreshing way, and that's exactly what this was. I absolutely loved the use of the orchids here. So beautiful! I don't have time for a proper comment but will come back when I can! <3
This is beautiful. Despite the form being a relatively short one, Samia manages to pack in such overwhelming emotion, depth and beauty into this poem. The scene of a couples first dance after promising each other forever really stands out here and is filled with such romance and care.
I adore the second sestet, it captures the new beginning of these lovers so elegantly and the tone of the overall poem is inspiring and hopeful, really captivating the feelings of the beginning of such a new and incredible journey.
The way it was phrased also leaves an open mystery of what the future has planned, which I always enjoy more than wrapping up with something specific happening.