This is a really interesting take on how such tragedies affect the doctors/nurses who have to deal with them day in and day out and have to live with these memories too.
I guess the sentiment could be applied to any passer by or witness to an accident or any kind of tragedy: they get caught up, often try to help, and then walk away, forgotten but forever affected.
We could all appreciate these gallant efforts (from whoever they come from) more.

A great write - all the best,
Ben

A perspective we often tend to oversee when we are ourselves caught up in grief and pain especially in a place like the hospital.
We never remember the faces of those strangers who round the clock is doing their best to help and relieve pain.
A very real scenario unfolds with your words
Beautiful poem Ren.
Great write.

Jay

Ren,

Your poem deserved to win, just beautiful!! Congratulations!!

Congratulations on your win!
Take care
Cindy

Hello Ren,

firstly congratulations.

At first when I saw the screen of one long verse I was put off. But, like persevering to save a life, I continued to read and am glad I did...

As I read I felt I was behind you willing your effort, willing life, any signs of life; a flutter of the eyes, a twitch of the mouth. The face so vivid, an image so powerful; no wonder it became unforgettable, even haunting.

I wanted a happy ending. It did not happen.

Then, the funeral... A stranger amongst the family and friends of the deceased. I imagine the feeling of being responsible, though knowing deep down that just is not the case.

...Anyway, the shame remains and guilt walks away alone.

Ren, this is very good and though I do not know if it is fiction or not it reads as the truth. I guess all in a days work, or in this case a nights work. A convincing write and worthy of a win!

Take care,

Michael

This poem packs a powerful punch right into the gut. I suppose it would do those of us on the other side of public service good to read this and know what efforts and care are put into saving our loved ones lives, even if they don't make it.

Congrats on the win

Omg this poem did deserve to win, God I wanted to cry because I'm guessing you're working in a hospital and it's all filled with sadness and despair likewise there is happiness and joy that they will make it.

This poem make me sad because I want to be a CNA and it will break my heart because I will likely see someone die and all I can do is alert the nurse. This poem probably made me cry because I know someone has lost someone that they loved very much and nothing would've made them come back

Overall very emotional and well made, there was nothing wrong with anything in this poem so it's very beautiful and inspiring and insightful to what the nurses, doctors, CNAs see every day.

Judging comment:

It almost reads as a spoken word piece; each verse is concise and powerful. The short narrative style of this piece really works wonder as it paints the other side of how death affects the doctors and nurses just as much as it affects the deceased's loved ones and family, it brings a light to something often overlooked. The movies and TV shows tend to depict the ER workers as 'desensitized' to deaths, even though they might be desensitized to some point, it still affects them a great deal, and I imagine it's not easy for the doctors and nurses to cope with it as well. A powerful write.

Judging Comment

I feel that everyone who works in the medical field, weather its hospital, Law enforcement or what have you, needs to read this poem.

It shows the true feelings and passion of the caretaker of human beings who are dealing with the dying.

This poem flowed and brought the reader into every single line. My mouth dropped and the tears flowed. Excellent write by Ren this week!!!!!!!

Ren, what a beautiful, heartfelt story. This is so personal and it gave me goose bumps.

It reminded me of when I was really ill in hospital because of my condition and the elderly lady died next to me with her family around. It was such a sad affair.

All the best, Em

Just coming back to read this again. :)

Splendid poem, Ren, well done!

5/5
IdTakeABulletForYou

Just saw this in your poems. Beautiful. I imagine this is how a hospital worker or ambulance driver or detective would feel... so sad :(

At first, i wasn't a fan of the end punctuation after every line, and how the poem was one giant long stanza. Then i read some comments, and it hit me. This is powerful. I like how the end punctuation works well, it speaks and slows down nicely to emphasize the drama. Truly saddening, and the ending... Touching.

This captures how I feel when in this situation- as a fellow healthcare professional death is a daily part of our lives. Wonderfully captured xx

How did I not realize you're a nurse lol?

This speaks so much about the kind of person that you are Dear Cowgirl! They do not know you, and you do not know them...someone dies and your heart breaks, you feel their loss...and you are sorry even if you might have done your best! You have a golden heart! A heart-touching story that is so beautifully penned. Really great piece!

Wow. This is so heartbreaking, powerful and haunting. It's so beautifully written and I love your use of repetition. This is such an amazing poem!

This is extremely powerful and hits home for both sides. My heart is with you.