I thought to read your poem....and I am mystified!

Such a powerful, impelling write that just gripped me as I read it!

Very well written and expressed.
Well done!

P.s. I've nominated your poem for the weekly contesr! :)

I loved this intricate and blood thirsty poem.
Very well written a dramatic and compelling tale

Congrats on the win Rob

Congratulations on your win! Very dark, very good.

This poem is shrouded in mystery, venomous emotions and dark setting which makes the whole read gripping and wanting more like a thirst! Excellent write and Congrats on the Win!

Rob,

You write so well. The rhyme, and imagery keep the flow throughout.
There is a a real mysterious darkness within this piece which keeps me gripped from start to finish.

Em

Judges comment

When I set out to judge I don't mean to pick holes. But I feel I need to justify a lower score and my 4 point choice usually takes the brunt. Despite only receiving 4 points this poem was my third pick out of all the nominations. It is a lovely piece of atmospheric story telling.
Very dark and very descriptive.
It is also a comma fest.
It is also grammatically correct. A comma at the end of each line, a capital letter begins each new line.
However I feel it detracts from the poem.
Ironically there is a comma missing in line 4 and line 20. Possibly line 26.
If you are going to use them, then use them all.
Personally I prefer to bin them. (I would probably bin the last line as well.)
So I am scoring this 4 points for the narrative and imagery. 4 points.

Judge Comments:

This poem by Rob, is dark and seductive! A delightful read this week.

Rob has a wonderful flow and rhythm to his rhyme pattern and yet it also has a unique flare to it!

I love how this poem starts off, unraveling secrets and twisted darkness as the poem unfolds... It reminds me of a lost love yearned for, dying from her twisted darkness... the nature tones are just an added uniqueness to this poem..

I really love the ending.... it just brings the tension and sadness home! well done Rob!!

Beautifully dark