Maher, this is so beautifully written but so sad. I can feel your emotions (still raw) coming through this. I liked how you set it out and could imagine the tune to go with it (or at least try)

It's so hard when we can't forget that person or move on from them, I find myself so often thinking about my first love and it's hard to get over it.

Em

The ending was one great idea. love it.

If only all of the music in our charts was written with lyrics half as good as this.

SL

SC ~ I love this. Yes i went and looked at the youtube clip.. very very touching. I cant wait until you add the vocals! :) Keep me updated! :)

"This heart, it cries a tune.
Distance grows
as dull crows fly
to a waterless lagoon..."--These lines alone convey such despondency and emotion, Maher. When coupled with the entirety of your song, it is a melancholic masterpiece.
~Bravo, Maestro.
Play On!
~Dean Kuch

Maher,

This is beautiful. .its like this poem strumming my heart ....

Dear pretty,
would you hide your smile
from my vision - so sublime?
Those lips,
the teeth they shelter
and the tongue that snores behind.

Perfect. ..

Gel