Comments : What good friends we were

  • 9 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Celine,

    a warm welcome to PnQ.

    I like this first poem posted here. The separate stanzas are pleasing on the eye.

    My favourite part is this:

    Years had passed
    Friendships turn to dust.
    Like the cloud passing by
    Up in the sky so high.
    ^
    A good metaphor - dust blowing away like a cloud

    Friendships are built on trust - we learn to rely on those we regard as friends. When this trust is betrayed it must feel like the friendship has disintegrated into dust, just to be swept away with the wind. How must this make you feel: Cold, bitter and alone.

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    As I mentioned, this is a good poem. Keep writing more and sharing.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 9 years ago

      by El_Mabini

      Thank you very much for the warm welcome. I'm also very thankful for appreciating my works. Don't worry I will pursue my dream of becoming one of the best poet in the history or one of the best author in the world. I'll continue writting and do my best

  • 9 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Welcome to the site Celine!
    I love this as a first piece!

    Well done!

    Be friend with someone,
    Is everything to me.
    I treat them as my family
    But not an enemy

    Is the first line meant to read "being friends with someone" ?

    I really do believe friendship is based on trust also. :)
    look forward to reading more!

    • 9 years ago

      by El_Mabini

      Thank you for reading and complimenting my works. And the second stanza means how some people do or feel when they meet some one new. I'll look forward reading more. thank you very much

  • 2 years ago

    by Ink

    This is a really potent write, I think many will find it very relatable. Great poem. Regards Ink