Heartless girl

by Mahesh Kachare   Feb 5, 2017


You have hurt me a lot
That the hard lesson, I got

I knew that trust is no more
It is a vital reality with core

You have given me only pain
So how can I trust you again ?

Though you became a heartless
I will be there to give you bless

You behaved like a vulture
Because you have no culture

The time will come in case
That I will hate your face

Don't come back in my life
Or I will kill you with knife

If you feel dull by playing with cart
To play, I will give you my heart.

    report violation
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  • 6 years ago

    by Anamika Patil

    Some girls are greedy. Finest poem.

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I perfectly understand your sentiments here, Mahesh. I can feel the hurt you have felt.

    Oh, about blue jay's comment, I do believe she said those not to make you feel bad. People can sometimes suggest something...which can be good!

    Cheer up...this is a good piece.

  • 7 years ago

    by Phil

    Some girls are heartless and to find the one that isn't we have to search, often it takes awhile but that's life.

  • 7 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Your tenses in this piece flip flopped a lot, and that confused me so much that I really lost interest in this piece overall. Which really disheartened me because I was so interested in the title and the fact that a rhyming poem didn't feel too corny even though it was very clearly forced.

    Sorry I can't give too much more feedback, but this piece really lost me.

    • 7 years ago

      by Mahesh Kachare

      With the reference of above mentioned comment, if you haven't that ability to speak only 02 positive words for someone, please don't give such negative comments.

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