Comments : Tinder

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    What a way to describe the making of a valiant sword or rather
    the person who puts in much care and effort to make it. I like
    the subtle rhymes within this write and it flows till the end where
    images emerge without been forced. Nice read and a nice write!

    • 8 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      The whole thing is a metaphor.

      It's about weapons manufacturers, how they take pride in what they create.

      Ultimately what they create is death and earn a hell of a lot of money in the process.

      I understand that they are necessary and I myself have Wielded one. Unfortunately the wrong hands wield them at times.

      Glad you enjoyed the read x

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Fella yet again Added to favourites, this one powerful write, great tempo and subject matter.

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by CJ Maleney

      Figured I'd best explain this one as it would be lost most.

      There are a lot of metaphors in stuff I write but I let people find they're own meaning. Sometimes they get it but most times they don't.

      You would have to travel round my head to fully get it and I don't envy anyone that journey lol

      Regards

      Craig

  • 8 years ago

    by Therapoetic4

    Loved that line...
    "It's the thing that starts the burn "
    So foreboding.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ren

    This is awesome! Your rhyming is flawless...and those last few lines...wow!
    Another great write! Excellent job!

  • 8 years ago

    by Lyical Madness

    Beautifully worded x

  • 8 years ago

    by Nicko

    Judging comment

    A raw poem with quiet a strong message. The meter and rhyme work well. I first thought it was about forging a sword or something similar but suspect there is a deeper meaning here about anything we create that can inflict harm on others? Anyway an enjoyable read well done!

  • 8 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I did wonder wonder who was behind this comment and again I was totally stumped.

    As for your comments you got it spot on

    Craig

  • 8 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Oh, another unique piece.