by Ben Pickard
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The description and resulting imagery is so good in this that I almost felt like I was there with you! |
by Shruti
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Thank you so much. :) |
by 2luv
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Rain hides the tears and matches how you feel, |
by Shruti
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Yes, right on spot. Thank you. :) |
by Ren
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Oh this is absolutely gorgeous, Shruti! Just...wow! Love it! Amazing job! :) |
by Shruti
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Thank you very much. ^-^ |
by Brenda
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Such lush visuals, I was totally wrapped up in this. So, so beautiful... |
by Shruti
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Thank you. :) |
by Brenda
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Congratulations on your win! This truly was a beautiful write- |
by Shruti
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Thank you. ^_^ |
by Ben Pickard
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well done on your win. |
by Shruti
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Thank you, and congrats on your win too. :) |
by Ren
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Congrats on the win, Shruti! This is such a beautiful piece! :) |
by Shruti
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Thank you for the nomination. :) |
by DarkLight
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Congrats on the win.. |
by Meena Krish
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The rain has an effect on people and the moods and visuals |
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Beautiful write! Thanks for sharing. |
by Shruti
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Thank you everyone. :) |
by Sushmita Mitra Chetri
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Wow! This is really nice. Congo!:) |
by Sushmita Mitra Chetri
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Wow! This is beautiful. Congo!:) |
by Em
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Awesome! |
by Shruti
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Thank you both. :) |
by Sai
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What I got from this poem was this magnificent feeling of hope that trickled into disappointment. The transition is something that's not easily achieved but you did so here with the use of vivid details and a peek of the speaker's thoughts here and there. |
by BlueJay
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Judging Comment: |
by chandelier
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A beautiful write:) |
by Shruti
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Thank you very much. :) |
by gumshuda
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Oh how beautiful this is Shruti. I'm glad it won, this deserved it. |
by Shruti
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Thank you. ^_^ |
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This is lovely!!! Grey streets, wet flip flops, black sky... Wonderful imagery! I can feel the sadness and disappoinment in this write, the sadness from rembering things about someone you hold dear and the disappoinment in waiting for the rain that didn't come. Am just not fond of "Rain over me... please." And the overuse of ellipsis, some worked, but I think the others can be much better without it. Nonetheless, this is an amazing write! Added to favorites and congratulations on the win! |
by Shruti
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Thank you very much. I appreciate everything you have said. Now two years after writing this poem, I think I have many improvements to make hahah! |
by Robert Long
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Honestly I have no words to how lovely this poem is. Such imagery brought tears to my ears as I connected to this poem...very good job Shruti |
by Shruti
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Thank you very much Robert. :) |