Comments : Drink!

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    I have no words for this other than fantastic!!

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    Double post

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Omg...now this is bloody fantastic. I love the playfulness in contrast to the content, it worked really well. I love the pace too. Whew, great write!

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    love the story and the rhyming in your piece, and well structured Mark

    Michael :)

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Mark, a really cool write. It was intertaining through out. Well done-

  • 6 years ago

    by Lucifer

    Another brilliant piece of work I read today.
    No doubts why it is nominated.

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Love this!
    "Toxins return violently to the floor" GENIUS!
    For reasons I can't explain though (maybe I'm not 'poet-ey' enough yet) the image this conjured in my head was of an olde worlde pub of yore, with large tankards of ale being served by wenches! Lol.
    Great write :-)
    =^.^=

    • 6 years ago

      by Mark

      That's the imagery I was trying to convey!! Well I was going to mention the 'wenches' lol...didn't want to offend

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Loved this it conjured up very vivid imagery and had great rhythm and rhyme. An excellent piece x

  • 6 years ago

    by Em

    JUDGING COMMENT:
    Drink! by Mark points: 4
    Mark has put his all into this piece about (in my opinion) a public house atmosphere and it's very well rhymed and I think somewhat fun. I love the pace of the lines. I appreciate the repetition because most drunks do repeat things, it's not something you see everyday but it hit the spot.

  • 5 years ago

    by Glenn G

    I enjoyed this piece very much. Good Job!

  • 4 years ago

    by Brittany Klein

    I loved this!

    I read it once, and then read it a second time and I felt like I got a beat going in my head of the olden times in a pub sloshing beer all over by clinking mugs with each other, chanting a song of the ages! I don’t know if that made sense or not lol. But I loved the rhythm of this piece!
    Your did great! 5/5
    ~~BrittBratt~

  • 3 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Hahaha, definitely screams of my old bar days. What perfect imagery you painted. :)