Comments : In Between

  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Fabulous and all done in an abab rhyme scheme which isn't easy to achieve without sounding forced.

    Take care,

    Ben

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you, Ben. This has been swirling in my head all morning so I finally had to sit down and get it all out. I sometimes just blurt stuff out and I don't even want to look at it when I'm done so I'm glad it doesn't sound weird :)

      -Mandy

  • 6 years ago

    by Mark

    Hey Mandy! Its a great twisted allegory. ;) so many more pages to come on here too I hope!

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Haha thanks, Mark :D

      -Mandy

  • 6 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    This one's well rhymed and flowed like a song in my head. Great job, Mandi!

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you :D

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    Mandy,

    Again a truly wonderful piece of writing, where a story unfolds and to be continued. I cant wait to read the novel, and hope the ending is bright and positive, with lots of love (full stop)

    Much love and warmth

    Michael x

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you! I'm hoping that as well :D

      -Mandy

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A wonderful piece unforced rhyming with a lovely tale.

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you, Milly! And thank you for the nomination, wow! I appreciate the feedback :D

      -Mandy

  • 6 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    This is so clever Mandy, I guess we all have blank pages still to fill with adventures. Love it!
    =^.^=

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you :D

  • 6 years ago

    by Lucifer

    If you keep on filling the blank pages of novel with such good poems, I wish it takes some time for novel to complete.

    More than happy to see it in nomination list.

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you! :D

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Mandy, love this. The story of our lives hopefully is never ending. So many chapters to tell. I hope I get to read many more of yours-well done-

    • 6 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you, Brenda! I definitely won't be able to not write :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Khai Montegrande

    wonderful piece Mandy! I am reading your poems and I don't like but LOVE most of it

    • 5 years ago

      by Mandy

      Thank you for the comment, Karen! <3