Comments : A piece of sunshine

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    There's a real sense of cutting loose about this piece, Naazz; finally saying, 'I've had enough and I am done with this'. Love can be wonderful but it can hold us as its desperate prisoners when things aren't right.
    Well done and well rhymed, as usual with your work.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 3 years ago

    by ddavidd

    This is so well written dear Naazz, way more mature wording than what I was writing in your age. Of course I am bilingual, perhaps in my mother tongue I could write as well as this,
    The emotion displayed here so skillfully, is not unknown to any person with heart. Life is full of turbulences. It fluctuates the more it fluctuates the more it waverers and the more your wings experience the air and space. Waves mean ups and downs, without them without turbulences we would only be staring at still life paintings, instead of living it.

    • 3 years ago

      by naaz

      Thank you so much ben, David and Stephanie!

  • 3 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Someone as sweet as you definitely deserves it
    Well written

  • 3 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    There comes a time enough is enough. Love can be very inspiring but it can also be devastating. We need to remain true to ourselves and have also great love for ourselves. All the best to you

  • 3 years ago

    by Lyn Aribaca

    great one.. nice catch

  • 3 years ago

    by Michael

    Simply wonderful and very well put together

    Michael :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Everyone deserves to be free to make their own decisions and to be happy. A strong piece. Milly x

  • 3 years ago

    by Amrita Singh

    The flow of this poem display strong emotions so beautifully..
    Liked it :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Brenda

    This is very strong. You have drawn your line in the sand and enough is enough. Good for you!