Comments : Dark side of the moon

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    I like this alot the only thing I'd suggest is centring it with the lines being different lengths but that's only personal preference

  • 2 years ago

    by ddavidd

    I think real love comes to the light in darkness, when no one could see you , when you do not need to pretend, you can see the real you.

    This is good really good dear Naazz. I am glad for you; you're finding your poetical self so soon.

  • 2 years ago

    by Amrita Singh

    Another beautiful creation..
    Thanks a lot for sharing it :)

  • 2 years ago

    by Brenda

    Naazz, this is just beautiful. Such a lovely write about love and what inspires you to write. Well done -

  • 1 year ago

    by Jamie

    This poem seems to be straight forward but as everyone has said it really is a beautiful poem.

    Stanza one- I always love poems that start with "And" because it always feels like you are jumping into a conversation. And the second line enhances this because you actually add dialogue to it. This start seems to be about love overcoming darkness. I do like how you used the word mist but darkness is blinding and so is mist in a way.

    Stanza two- I love this stanza because again it is a great continuation of the first. I think the reader can safely assume this poem is inspired by the love they hold within or the loce of another or just love of poetry itself. Just by what is written so far i think its the love you have of poetry itself.

    Stanza three- This stanza is cliched but its written well, but i think this stanza is about how sometimes love can make us fall deeply and sometimes too deeply. You have obviously fall a few times and have seen what it can do.

    Stanza four is my favorite because really does wrap the poem up nicely. I think this is talking about anyone falling in love and that love has a light and darker side.

    I feel like the "she" in the beginning is the person this poem is about and the one who inspires you to keep writing. But i love this poem because it can be interpreted in many different ways. Great write.

  • 1 year ago

    by Meena Krish

    A love poem taken from a different view point. There is a sense
    of mystic feel in it a tenderness in the way it has been written/spoken.
    I also the subtle rhymes weaved into this write and the touch of
    romance entwined with nature...lovely read!

    Thank you for the in depth comment on my write...appreciate it :)

  • 1 year ago

    by gumshuda

    Would you possibly like to add 'the' in your last line :

    even 'the'dark side of the moon?

    • 1 year ago

      by naaz

      Corrected! thanks!

  • 1 year ago

    by [M(/)U]

    Wow this is so beautiful!! I really enjoyed reading this, thank you!