Comments : Fate of the Forgotten

  • 4 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Death. A dark topic and not for everyone. The truth is we are all heading to that destination. Some of us crawl there, whilst others seem to be running there. I see more and more running away from it. As if, eh?

    This senyru form tells the reader of the ironic nature of death. A person who has wanted to end their life prematurely in the past, is now faced with the possibility of death, other than suicide.

    Naomi, this is hard to read from someone so young. Im glad you no longer feel life is too much. I hope more than that, that your prognosis improves greatly.

    ((Hugs)) x

  • 4 years ago

    by Mark

    Dark write....brings out a beauty in poetry.

  • 4 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    I liked the power this piece has although hard hitting (I hope not literal) as it's only a few words so packs a real kick in the gullet.. My only query is the title as it's the last word of the whole piece.. How about 'grim reaper?'
    As I said previously I do hope it isn't literal and that you are well.
    Take care
    Em x

  • 4 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    A poem that connects suicidal ideations with the death of loved ones, and I know the story behind this. That makes it all more poignant.

    I would like it better if you put a period after death.
    After all, it is the end.

    I did not nominate this because I love you, but because you did a wonderful job with this Senryu and it deserves recognition.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • 4 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Thank you all.

  • 4 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    That the thought of death is far apart from the reality of death has been superbly portrayed in this bullet sized prose. So much depth in so few words is excellent. Milly x

  • 4 years ago

    by Brenda

    Nams, powerful write, so few words but really packs a punch. Well done-