Comments : Gone too soon (free verse)

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    This is so very sad to read. I'm sorry for your loss.
    You mention that you hope that they are now at peace, in a place far from pain. I think that from there they can look over those who love them still. ((Hugs)) x

  • 7 years ago

    by Mark

    This is sad. Gone too soon... felt your pain. Had to nominate

  • 7 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    So sorry, Naomi.

    Take care

  • 7 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This is heart breaking

  • 7 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    ...sorry for your loss...take care

  • 7 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Thank you all

  • 7 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Morning Naomi,

    sorry for being absent from your posts. I will try and make this up...

    free verse sometimes allows the poet to ramble on in a confusing maze of words. You have penned a piece that is not confusing and conveys your grief at loosing someone so so close to you. I felt the unfairness of it all when they left what seemed exclusive. The part wear you admit to fearing the world seeing what you had seen all along spoke volumes and was brave to write down - I hope this helped.

    As a sad write, the emotion leaks of the page convincingly.

    Well done - I hope the time that has passed since writing this has helped to heal, even if just a little. ((hugs))

    • 7 years ago

      by deeplydesturbed

      Thank you Dear Mr Darcy.
      It was difficult for many reasons..
      One being i saw this person on Friday and on Monday I got the news they had passed..
      Out of the blue, nothing seemed amiss..
      It was, hard.. still is..

      I suppose I have a long way to go still. but thank you for your kind words. No need to apologies. I will admit I was less active for a little while and have a lot to catch up on, but am back now..

  • 7 years ago

    by Brenda

    Nams, I'm sorry I missed this and I'm sorry for your loss. Losing someone is never easy. Hugs you-