Comments : Travelling through my Coma

  • 2 years ago

    by Jamie

    Nominated- Jesus christ, this poem is so unique and I give you so many props for using so many song titles well enough to not affect the flow of the poem and not have it feel like a rambling. The only thing I will say is this felt like a life flashing before your eyes kind of moment- I saw it as kind of a timeline of this person's life through the era of songs you mentioned, going step by step and addressing each song as something that happened in this person's reality. I also enjoyed the set up, because you mentioned the radio in the very first line, so in hindsight it was a great thing to mention the radio. What an excellent idea for a poem that deserves to be seen.

    • 2 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Jamie, I always appreciate your comments.

  • 2 years ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Erm ... bloody WOW Darren!
    I am totally in love with this epic, free-falling, lyric-related battle of consciousness. Well worth the time it took to read it and thanks for entertaining me through my lunch break :-) x
    =^.^=

    • 2 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Kitty, it is a bit bigger than initially intended.
      thanks for reading.

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Darren,

    Your poem is prompting me to share something about myself that I dont usually speak public about, only on occasion..... this is one of those times.

    Before I share; I feel the "coma" represents a metaphore to how you are feeling and I want to stand and applaud you for writing such a powerful and outstanding poem.

    Now, let me share-- Back in 2006 I was very ill, very ill.... and I got so ill that I slipped into what Doctors call Myexdema Coma, caused by Hypothyroid Disease. I was in a coma for 7 days.... I have many specs of memories of a dark tunnel and whispers of loved ones... I am very musically drawn, always have been so old songs rang in my head... I know my sister played music and read books by my bedside so Im not sure what I was hearing but songs played a huge roll in my thoughts. I was a very troubled woman back in that time frame and I feel the coma set me back on track in life... it "Woke me Up" and brought me back to the woman I am today... still as goofy as ever, but true and honest and just being the soul I was meant to be.... Comas can be a pure awakening.... thats all I really want to share about that but I want you to know dear friend how much this poem brought out in me.... YOU mastered the essence of coma to a tee, so much so that it brought me to tears, I was like OMG how did he know?

    I have read many a poem on Coma... and you my friend have written the TOP poem in my book.... I want to hug you right now... truly tear jerker for me! Hugs you

    • 2 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks for reading and commenting Andrea, more importantly thanks for feeling you were able to share such a personal story. It means a lot that something I have written can stir up something in this way. I'm glad you pulled through all of this and are able to look back on it as just a memory.
      take care

  • 2 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Dude, seriously? Just speechless. So unique and beautiful!
    Jamie beat me to the nomination, I was halfway through and was like yep, totally nominating.

    • 2 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Hannah, appreciate you taking the time to read.

  • 2 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Those voices in that tin pot radio have a lot to answer for. As for Hell, well they can keep the dogs and bikers for the poets destined for that hot place.
    Darren, I enjoyed every verse and know how an idea can cause a poem to run on and on and...

  • 2 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    The only words I have for this Darren will mirror what everyone else has already said so in just pleased to see such a genuinely unique piece nominated..

  • 2 years ago

    by Scott Cole

    Awesome job man, a pleasure to read....

  • 2 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    An amazing write Darren. I don't think anything I can say on top of what everyone else has already said can do it justice. The detail and the way it takes the reader on a journey into your life is amazing. Glad to see it nominated. Best wishes Milly x

  • 2 years ago

    by Darren

    Thanks everyone who commented, this poem is a bit on the long side because it contains 78 song titles.
    These are the top selling songs for each year from 1940-2108 from the US billboard.

  • 2 years ago

    by Guilty By Design

    I loved what you did here! It’s simply amazing.