The last stanza is stunning in many ways. A great command of language, and I enjoyed the more concrete imagery you depicted here. I find the first part a little too wordy in places, but that is not so much as a criticism as a personal comment. I always feel when trying to capture a ‘real’ idea, as opposed to a fantasy one, it’s nicer to use narrative, concrete language. This poem proves it for me, powerfully ended but formerly subdued in some ways. I always enjoy your poetry, and there’s really something here for everyone. Awesome :)
When I'm writing about a tragic experience within my life, I tend to add cryptic, wordy messages in spots just for personal acknowledgment, and I almost omitted that within this poem but decided that it needed that flippage of wording as I call it, ha! I do love your comments, that truly are a joy to read, so happy you are back!!
Straight from the heart and the truth well spoken. I give you prompts in every aspect and the school of life is a never-ending journey. We do the best we can as a parent and the how part is something else. You are a great inspiration to so many and my heart goes out to you. Keep strong. Hugs
The metaphorical language of this poem is truly stunning to behold; it has a sort of ominous feel to it, which is perfect for the poem’s theme of ghosts; even though, how I understood the poem, these ghosts are not ones of the past, but living ones in the present. It seems Maple Tree writes about the disintegration of a family, a mixture of reality interwoven with the darkness in her own head. I truly love how she seems to take ownership of the experience, it being made into a life lesson toward the end. Spectacularly dark write.