Comments : The Battle of the Body and the Brain

  • 9 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    I really like this, there are a couple of things I could read into it but what I Tate from it is the struggle.

    That determination to carry on when it may not necessarily be easy to do so for whatever reason.

    Regards

    Craig

  • 9 months ago

    by the color green

    as, not particularly not in place as this might seem, this poem reminds me a bit about going to the gym. going to the gym consists of making the same movements repeatedly with different muscles to make them stronger or bigger or whatever you were there for, but there is a struggle- the kind that makes you want to BE better than what you usually are, to spit upon your old shell of a shoddy self.

    it made me think and i like it.

  • 9 months ago

    by Michael

    A very personal piece of struggling, and thank you for sharing.
    We can never determine how things will turn out for us, but we continue the best we can.
    A powerful write S.
    Michael.

  • 9 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Superb piece well rhymed with vibrant and deep emotion at its best. Loved this. Milly x

  • 9 months ago

    by Imperfection

    I kinda get where ur going with this it’s hard battling ur body and brain

  • 9 months ago

    by Brenda

    S, I like the fact you are writing. I love the fact you are delving into yourself. It's not always easy, there are doors we would rather keep shut instead of letting loose the feelings that are kept under lock and key. But you are doing it, that speaks volumes, it also speaks of growth and acceptance. That's huge! Keep writing! Hugs my friend-

  • 8 months ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I really enjoyed the meter and rhyme of this piece. Nicely crafted.