Brenda, you've written and set this out so carefully that each word is perfect. The cosmos is something I often stare at and lose myself in deep contemplation. Each star a promise, each star a dream come true. When comparing our star to our own earthly lights it is easy to see our lesser light. We can of course be as bright, but we humans have that unwritten promise of a dream come true in our hands. It's up to us to shine and show how we can truly shine.
Thanks, Brenda. This is my favourite write of yours and ifi may, I'll keep this little star in my pocket. Xx
I would be honored for you to keep this little star. It's true, comparing ourselves to this vast universe we do seem a bit dim lol. I still search out the night sky, especially when I'm up north, the sky is beautifully clear up there. Hugs-
Brenda a really lovely piece. I used to lay on the cliff tops with my brothers staring at the starlit sky discussing the world and the Universe and it was so much more vivid in those days so I can completely relate to this.
Regarding the last two stanza's I think that you have already become that shining star and will continue to shine on. Your kindness, positive outlook and caring nature spreads warmth and light with every kind thought and deed. Glad to see this nominated. Much love Milly x
Thank you so much Milly! I too remember as a kid looking up at the sky in awe. I do try to live a positive life, somedays other stuff gets in your way and you start doubting what you are doing. Hugs you!
I like this Brenda
If I'm reading it correctly your comparing the night sky to aspects of your self and how no matter how hard you try to shine some people just don't see you in the haze of everyday life x
Thank you Paul. There was 2 parts to this poem. One was how much larger our world is to us and we tend to lose sight of that grinding away on the everyday stuff and also a part of me that has always wrestled with feeling I made a big enough difference or did something that actually mattered.
3 years ago
by Ben Pickard
I have slept on a mountainside in Snowdonia with nothing but a sleeping bag and the night sky covering me. There was not a light to be seen from a town or vehicle and not a noise to be heard apart from a little stream trickling nearby. Apart from learning how cold you can be at times like those, I truly did learn the insignificance of all the petty things in our lives and just how significant all the important things were. My point is, I get this write and love it.