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  • 6 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    I've so done that, lost my work. How frustrating!
    It's okay, but, to me, the flow is off.

    It's here I can go to find peace of mind. 
    *Its here I go to find peace of mind

    Here to escape from earth and time,
    *good

    Here I can be happy, here I can be free,
    *here I can be happy and be free

    Here, from the worlds insanity. 
    *good
    ^
    Just an idea

    • 6 years ago

      by (Olwin ) Lee Mcdonald

      Thank you thank you THANK YOU Mr. Darcy! :D ... ( bows ) ha! Lol.

      YES ! The flow is definately off in the first line! Think that's the way I had it originally. . ( seriously not joking ) :D
      ( just got so frustrated when I lost poem and rushed second one lol)

      And your second correction is correct too! :D

      THANK YOU most kindly again :)))

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I can relate to losing poetry its a horrible feeling right down in the centre of your stomach realising that its gone for ever. Getting back to the poem... Being true to the person you are is the best gift you can give yourself a true blessing. Milly x

  • 6 years ago

    by Vanesa

    My ‘here’ place is my. ‘Here I can be whole, here I can heal.’ Beautifully written thank you for sharing

  • 6 years ago

    by CJ Maleney

    glad you did submit it. It's fantastic and I think it will echo the thoughts and feelings of many.

    oh it's rhymes fantastically too and I'm a lover of rhymes

  • 6 years ago

    by (Olwin ) Lee Mcdonald

    Craig... Thank you so much for your comment ! And glad you liked my poem :)

    I love rhyming poems too lol.
    ( I can't seem to write them unless they DO rhyme ! Haha )

    Thanks again ,
    Olwin

  • 6 years ago

    by Walter

    Although the original you lost the words
    This one 'Here' I'm glad I heard!

    This is truly an inspirational poem that many will relate to. A delightful read :)