Reading this the first few times, I honestly didn't think you needed so many commas, as the way you placed and spaced the lines gave a natural pause. Like the third, fourth and fifth stanza I thought didn't need the commas, but that's completely my opinion! I feel like a pause is implied when you skip a line. There's a tenderness in this, of the worry and wonder if the ocean and storms will be cruel, if tonight will be the night. That even the best of sailors, the most prepared of men, can fall prey to this storm and be captured by it. I also loved how you mentioned the kiss good morning but not goodbye, that emphasis that it is not the end.
The anticipation at the end and the anxiety is palpable, the softest patter of rain can turn into a nightmare.
Yeah, sometimes I do that by mistake! I write poems in big blocks sometimes then separate them into stanzas afterwards, leaving some of the punctuation behind. I agree there’s too many! I’ve actually removed a couple :)