Woah. First, this would be phenomenal performed because when reading it, I could totally see and hear it as a slam poem.
This resonated with me beyond words but I will try to explain - the vulnerability is painstakingly tangible in this poem. From the first love, to comprising self worth, the human want to just be loved and held yet the understanding that comes with time... how we must first love ourselves and respect ourselves so we can know that is how we deserve to be treated.
Everything felt real and raw in this piece and I felt the frustrations of growing up, of trying to be independent yet things going wrong and not being able to control the depression and feeling like it's all caving it. It read to me like a constant reminder to "be gentle", be gentle with yourself as you go through life. And then someday, that love that gives space, freedom, acceptance, will be found with someone else. And you can share it together.
I'm going to read this again and again in the next few days. Thank you so much for sharing your voice and soul in this.
Wow! I don't normally like long poems but this is so astute, cynical, and it carries throughout a perfect wisdom taking the reader right through the different scenarios to beware of from from first love onwards. It is a totally compelling read that really should be read by anyone at the age of 18 to serve as a valid warning and for older people who haven't yet figured out the pitfalls of dating. Well done on an excellent and captivating piece. Milly x
Wow, they should teach this at schools. Practical life advice to survive and be happy in the world rather than just to compete and chase money. This is great! I agree with the relationship parts wholeheartedly, though with women in my case. People can really be horrible, but they can also be good, I suppose.
Excellent write and thanks for sharing it with us all :)
3 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Wow.. There's still pieces of my in here even at 30 years old! I wish I'd have read this sooner years ago