There were a few times I thought too many commas were used, unnecessarily, but of course that's just my opinion.
"watch through broken,
in the entire neighborhood,"
I thought the line break was enough of a pause to not need the comma in the first lines.
My favorite line, however, was "to turn their beds into a cemetery for the living"
AHH, that would sound even more haunting in spoken word!
Before reading the ending, what I actually thought about this piece was a woman seducing men and you turned it into a horror poem. Elaborating that perhaps the idea of women who seek out married men, seek to destroy their foundation and do not care if the men are fathers, was some form of evil. Of retribution. And the family would have to deal with the aftermath when they wake.