Comments : Times Are Changing

  • 4 years ago

    by ddavidd

    These question marks look out of place. Must be the glitch. Whenever someone pastes the poems ( in opposed to typing it perhaps) most likely, in P&Q, the pop-ups just appear all over the places.
    Here makes it annoying to imagine, what if the writer him/herself put them there, and why??

  • 4 years ago

    by Sunshine

    I totally agree with Bob, I wanted to dig deeper into the poem but I couldn't grasp everything well. Some questions marks seemed placed by you, others out of place. Some gave the impression that you were making rhetorical questions, trying to to emphasize a statement.

    It sounds clearer if you also let go of the comma after dead. The flow in my opinion sounds much better. I see you have beautiful statements and some great descriptions, I'm just not being able to make connections between your verses. It might be my fault, and it might be that the poem needs some reorganization of ideas. I will come back and read it again!