Comments : Wishes

  • 4 years ago

    by Everlasting

    Wishes... thanks for sharing. I like the simile used in the poem.

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Concise and heartbreaking. I sense genuine feeling in this piece.

    Take care

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I liked how you made the distinction of "our" memories instead of just saying "memories" in general. I felt like you could add a few more lines or perhaps punctuation to further show emphasis. "ghost in the night" wasn't too creative but it did prove a point. The use of "tremble" was strong as it's such a simple word but conveys so much as the same time. Maybe a specific detail about this person or a particular image would add to this piece, to give a little more depth and insight as to missing this person?

    It's hard fighting the memories though, debating whether to accept them and allow yourself to be lost in them, or trying to push them away because the pain is too much. Keep writing!