Comments : Cups.

  • 4 years ago

    by Everlasting

    I have yet to listen to the song but this is a contemplative write that caught my attention. I specially like this stanza:

    Do I fill these cups with
    coffee and nothing else?
    No sugar, no cream
    because the sweetest
    things will stick
    to my teeth
    and won't let me sleep.

    ^ “because the sweetest things will stick” <- this made me go “huh? Ohhhhhh nice while I nodded” I don’t know why though. But it created that effect on me.

    Sorry for this lame comment. But I’m glad you shared this piece with us.

  • 4 years ago

    by D.

    Love the running metaphor of the cups, Maryanne, it’s really well executed and effective :) the last two lines were also a great ending.

    Great to see your writing again

  • 4 years ago

    by Star

    I got chills reading the last two lines, after the cup image. And when I read that it was inspired by the song “Orange Juice”, I could see that. The song leaves a strong impression, the first time I listened to it I got chills as well.
    I love the poem. I love how I could how was inspired by the song, but yer original! It spoke to me. We give taste to life, sometimes it is tasteless and means nothing, sometimes bitter yet satisfying and many more. :)