Comments : The Leaves and Paradise

  • 8 months ago

    by Michael

    I really like this Everlasting, that comes with a message for sure :) leaves keep the earth alive! Nicely done, M :)

  • 8 months ago

    by hiraeth

    "Its as if the ground
    was a Heaven for those leaves
    while for us
    a Hell we try so hard
    to escape"

    uh, wow. im at a loss for words right now, but hopefully i'll have something by the time this hits front page!!

    • 8 months ago

      by Daniel

      I agree with the above ^ wonderful ending to a thoughtful and poignant piece!

    • 8 months ago

      by Everlasting

      Thank you Mark and Daniel.

  • 7 months ago

    by Mark

    Such a beautiful win!

  • 7 months ago

    by Angie

    Its a no wonder this was a win... congrats! Quite a powerful message within your words and beautifully written

  • 6 months ago

    by Star

    Judging Comment:

    The leaves with a short life unlike us, with their beautiful changing visuals in the poem; hanging like a cocoon, changing colors, who are like butterflies with the win d as their wings. They want to get to the ground to fertilize soils, and breath back life to it. They are simple and can reach their goal once their life is over.

    While us humans, aim for reaching higher skies , and no matter how far we go, we still don’t get there. Even after our life time. No matter how much we achieve, we rarely have satisfaction .

    And the ending stanza, so beautiful wraps up the poem perfectly!!!