Comments : Ceaseless Seasons

  • 2 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    So many thoughts reading this! I have kept coming back to this all weekend. I love your voice in this, how each season affects you in a personal way, how each season adds to this heaviness in you, this burden you must carry.

    Your writing is always creative, heartfelt and completely "you" - if that makes sense. I find such purpose and meaning in it, and that's just another reader interpreting and seeing your poem in one light.

    Perhaps this is simply a reflection on how I currently feel, but the seasons seem to pass before we can fully "realize" or enjoy them, and how cliche it is to say "I can't believe it's already this time of year!", but it brings me to the realization how quickly life can pass... and how we can feel overlooked. I did feel that sense of loneliness in this, of maybe being and seeing the aftermath of change. Of knowing we are powerless. Of witnessing and having to accept it.

    Love this beyond words, ddavidd.

    • 2 years ago

      by ddavidd

      Beyond word is good. It is even better than poetry. It means you like my piece in silence. I like silence, the true silence, where you could hear all the words in the world.

      Thank you so kindly. I wrote this in 28 in persian. This was how I shifted the same motion to English though the vision is the same.

  • 2 years ago

    by Star

    Judging Comment:

    I love how the poem is formatted in 4 parts; like the four seasons.
    The transition from the title to part 1 of the poem, which says that the seasons are heavy. Kind of set me to believe that the seasons here is the mindset, mentality, psychological well being of a person.
    A person goes through their life, experiencing so many things. Part 3 had kept dragging me, like a person is goin into depression and moving out of it in part 4. Or even any kind of hardship in life.

    One interesting thing is the use of autumn in part 1, and Fall in part 2. They could be synonyms, or it could even mean the fall of someone. Which also brings me back to the idea of a hardship which starts in part 3.

    Anyway, this is very thought provoking. And can be interpreted in so many ways.