or sign in with e-mail
Don't have an account? Register Here!
This is the opposite of the previous sonnet, it’s very sweet!!!
by Poet on the Piano
Oh, Mr. Darcy, this was quite lovely! I just want to sigh after that last line, it's so genuine and promising, like this life is worthwhile, and their love is the ultimate glory in your days.
There were two lines I personally felt sounded a bit awkward, but completely my opinion. I don't write Sonnets so I give you props of course, and everything else flowed effortlessly...
"reciting songs from in my very core."
- The phrasing of "from" paired with "in my very core" was not something I'd heard before. I usually hear "from within", so the phrasing kind of made me read twice and felt a bit off.
"Lyrics of love will last the long last while."
- The repetition of "last" threw me off and it seemed like this could be worded better.
Only my silly thoughts though ;)
There's a reverence and passion and honesty in this love that seeps through each line. Thanks for sharing this!
Aww, so sweet.
Awww. True love is a bliss! And so is your sonnet writing skills Mr. Darcy!