Radiating memories grab
onto your core,
Paralyzing pain crawls up
Yet I send you a raft
with a comfy chair
and a fresh cup of coffee ..
The title is horrifying, I think it sets a mood for the poem early on, which is why it is clever.
Sending you best wishes <3
2 months ago
by Tony Grannell
'Misguided energy': an interruption to the norm, both the mental and physical to one's wellbeing. A disturbance(s) as if out of nowhere and disturbingly portrayed in this captivating poem. May you find fairer weather and a pleasant ocean to sail. Your writings are as profound as they are eminent in the province of poetry. Excellent!
Woah, the "pain only comes in waves" hit hard. And those last few lines. Heartbreaking. I don't think there is anything that can be as painful as the drowning feeling, a helplessness, a fog you can't just escape from.
Oh, one little thing: "Iv'e" should be "I've" in the last stanza.
At first I wasn’t sure I liked this, rereading through a second time is when it really hit me. I hope the sun comes out for you and it gravity is enough to reduce the waves to something more bearable. Good wishes x