Comments : Unknown lover

  • 3 years ago

    by prasanna

    I really love the whimsy nature of this poem, it's really cute. Well done! Out of curiosity, what do the numbers ( 3 52 4 3) mean?

    • 3 years ago

      by Vanesa

      It was three twenty five in the morning on April third
      Just some form of keeping track of when I write things

  • 3 years ago

    by Kate

    I actually quite like the way you have some words stand alone. When I read it, I pause for a little longer and it emphasizes the point you’re trying to make, that this person beautiful, enticing. I like that you mimic that in the second half but with negative things. It contrasts so well.

    As for the ending, I’m not sure what you could do with it. You could leave it as you not know what all of the scars are for or if the poem is supposed to praise the person or show them in a beautiful light you could return to that theme, like the beginning.