Comments : Your Ghost

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    love this! <3

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thanks ^_^

  • 1 year ago

    by Tony Grannell

    Hello Star,

    The sweet notes of love, a dance remembered to leaving one to tango. The twining of word, dance and music in an exceptional passage of poetry. Very well done, Star. I have very much enjoyed reading this.

    Stay safe.

    Kind regards, Tony.

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you so much!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Wonderfully written piece, Star. This has real purpose and continuity.

    Stay well.

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thannk you, you too :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Oh dear. The word choice is so neat and the poem is so natural. it actually hurts. I love it!

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you Rania your words made me smile!!!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    Just coming back to leave a somewhat decent comment; I really like your word choice in this, there's some sway to it, it's sweet. I love the play between the senses, sight, smell and taste in the second last stanza; I think it did really well to set this poem up to be more 'imaginative' which is driven home by the last stanza, where you write 'if i knew our time together/would mean nothing' which isn't written in a depressing way, but lends credence to the theory that this person you're spending time with isn't real (which makes sense given the title, but it might also be flashbacks to a person who was around). Kind of rambling, so I'll stop here. :)